My feeble attempt at lyrics

So, one of my recent adventures is doing some song writing. Feeling a little creative; I came out with this a few months ago. My band has it a full song version now; hopefully it gets some legs. I'm not a pro, but so what. I named it "siren call"; influenced by the Greek Mythology of Sirens, "portrayed as seductresses who lured nearby sailors with their enchanting music and voices to shipwreck on the rocky coast of their island. "

SIREN CALL

LYRICS: MIKE HOOPER SUMMER 2011

We once traveled this road together
Our team, an island in the sea
Back to back, we faced the world
But we stopped facing each other

I’d give it all away
For you to see me again
cause the man that stands before you now 
Hollow, from what he was then

Chorus:
can you hear the siren calling
can you hear the siren calling
It was the answer that you gave
a life i couldn't save
A life full of promise 
but caught in your wake
and i know this is fake
a life full of promise

It’s time for me to go away 
To reap what I sow from this sad tale 
My best wasn’t enough to keep you here 
Fade to black, ashamed, fade away